“Invasion” by Ioana Vișan – One family discovers that the world around them was
invaded by some strange creatures. Invasion might be a very strong word for the
present short story. The invasion in question comes in lighter tones, it is a
peaceful collision between two worlds rather than the harsh definitions usually
associated with the term. It is interesting the perspective of the two
colliding worlds, looking on each other from an up-side down position. The
connection – or a different invasion altogether – between the two is made by
the children with their wonderful curiosity of exploring the world and the sweet
innocence with which they approach the new things. The story is an intriguing
but short exercise of imagination and does not offer more than the barest
traces of conflict. It is its only fault and I believe that further development
can help it improve.
“Between vultures and humans” by Teodora Matei –
Te’Lee falls in love Raa’Ming, but that might not be on the liking and the
traditions held by the She-Vultures, the elderly widowed women, who apply the
local law according to the Old Book they hold. An enclosed community with
strict rules, a heroine who loves to discover and learn new things, a silent
conflict smoldering from the new events in Te’Lee’s life. Te’Lee doesn’t
question the rules known only by those who impose them and that are followed
blindly by her fellow villagers, but her curiosity and questioning of the way
tradition is maintained lead the young protagonist to a bending of rules, a
silent rebellion through the act of love.
“With
the head left back, I can’t detach my sight from the features I don’t see
enough. I remade them in my memory for tens and hundreds of times. When I
couldn’t do it, I forced myself to forget, to pretend that I never met him,
that I didn’t enter in the Stone House, I don’t know his touch and whisper. The
next moment I had in my mind, crystal clear, his face; I heard in my thought or
in reality ‘Te’Lee, I’ve missed you…’
The
last years have been a sway of emotions and feelings; innocent and curious, in
the beginning, heartbreaking – towards the end.”
The story breaths through its main character
melancholy, despair and resignation, leaves a bitter-sweet after taste, all in
a romantic and poetic prose.
“The
night rips the seconds one by one, knits them together and throws them back to
me – hours, through the bars. I catch them and, as much as I struggle to
untangle them, I don’t succeed. Threads of time stick to my fingers and are
gathering in rough yarns of feelings.”
As much as I liked the concept and the language of
Teodora Matei’s story there were a couple of things that didn’t leave at peace.
I understand that according to the She-Vultures’ Old Book and in the eyes of
the community Te’Lee’s actions and associations are seen as evil, but there is
something more to the vileness of the events and characters that is not
completely disclosed. It is only described as such, but it is never clearly
defined. The same goes for the supernatural elements, obviously existent, but I
couldn’t shake the feeling that is something more to it than it is actually
revealed.
There will be the matter of the story’s end but it is
difficult to register that as a complaint, more so if the sudden changes are
seen in the light of rebellions, especially single-handled ones, hardly ending
up in complete happiness.
2 comments:
Thank you for reviewing my little story, Mihai!
Don't mention it, Ioana! :)
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